Through the eyes - C&C are most welcome !!

[Tejal]

Dear All,

Kindly give your C&C for my below images.

Regards,

Tejal

IMG_8605- by Tejal Imagination, on Flickr

IMG_8601- by Tejal Imagination, on Flickr

[bnnrcn]

#1 is a very meaningful image Tejal

[Tejal]

#1 is a very meaningful image Tejal

Thank you Binnur for your feedback .

[Dave Humphries]

#1 for me too.

Why?
I think because there's the link between the mask and her eyes also being masked, the open face of the gentleman works less well, also he is walking out of frame and away from the mask and that may also be influencing me. There is also something bright and silvery at the left edge of frame which my eyes keep getting attracted to, away from the darker toned face of the male subject. That said, his eye contact is a good thing. I wonder if a crop, or just some dodging (his face) and burning (the silver thing) might improve the second shot.

Going back to #1; the arrangement of two similar background figures visible through the eyes works very well, great camera positioning to achieve that.

#1 is definitely an inspired idea, well executed.

Thanks, Dave

[Tejal]

#1 for me too.

Why?
I think because there's the link between the mask and her eyes also being masked, the open face of the gentleman works less well, also he is walking out of frame and away from the mask and that may also be influencing me. There is also something bright and silvery at the left edge of frame which my eyes keep getting attracted to, away from the darker toned face of the male subject. That said, his eye contact is a good thing. I wonder if a crop, or just some dodging (his face) and burning (the silver thing) might improve the second shot.

Going back to #1; the arrangement of two similar background figures visible through the eyes works very well, great camera positioning to achieve that.

#1 is definitely an inspired idea, well executed.

Thanks, Dave

Thank you Dave for your feedback. I have tried to revised the other one, which is as below -

Ganesha by Tejal Imagination, on Flickr

[Shadowman]

Nicely done, always creative with your themes. It's interesting how different the shots with the masks are as your positioning reveals or conceals the nostrils and mouth, I think concealing works better or cropping both to eliminate the openings.

[Tejal]

Nicely done, always creative with your themes. It's interesting how different the shots with the masks are as your positioning reveals or conceals the nostrils and mouth, I think concealing works better or cropping both to eliminate the openings.

Thanks John for your feedback. I think 16X9 in 1st and 4X6 in other would work better. In 1st it would have given more intensity of eyes and in other too, going close would have work better. ( I am realizing it now after checking crops)

[Minerva]

Well done Tejal

[Tejal]

Well done Tejal

Thank you Carol

[madcrow]

Tejal, no C&C just well done, like the shots.

[Tejal]

Tejal, no C&C just well done, like the shots.

Thank you so much. ☺

[Manfred M]

It's an interesting idea that is not quite working for me.

1. The mask is not sharp and is in the foreground so that isn't working as well as it could. I wonder if an ultra wide angle shot and everything in focus might give you a stronger image?

2. The brightness of the mask versus the rest of the scene overwhelms and keeps out eyes on the mask and keeps them from moving beyond it. I wonder if a darker mask might not be a better choice for this type of image?

[Tejal]

It's an interesting idea that is not quite working for me.

1. The mask is not sharp and is in the foreground so that isn't working as well as it could. I wonder if an ultra wide angle shot and everything in focus might give you a stronger image?

2. The brightness of the mask versus the rest of the scene overwhelms and keeps out eyes on the mask and keeps them from moving beyond it. I wonder if a darker mask might not be a better choice for this type of image?

Thank you for your feedback. I may have something with dark mask. I need to check. If I have I will post it very soon. ☺

[Round Tuit]

Tejal,
I very seldom disagree with Manfred but in this case I think that the out of focus white mask works extremely well to engage the viewer. It is the first thing that the eyes are attracted to by virtue of its large and bright area. But because it is out of focus, the scene through the eyes immediately capture your attention and after lingering in there a moment or two, you discover the veiled woman with her "masked" face. Brilliant.
André

[Tejal]

Tejal,
I very seldom disagree with Manfred but in this case I think than the out of focus white mask works extremely well to engage the viewer. It is the first thing that the eyes are attracted to by virtue of its large and bright area. But because it is out of focus, the scene through the eyes immediately capture your attention and after lingering in there a moment or two, you discover the veiled woman with her "masked" face. Brilliant.
André

Thank you for sharing your view.

[NorthernFocus]

You do come up with some creative ideas, Tejal. I agree with others that the first image is the stronger of the two due to the more interesting person moving into the frame. However I like the lesser amount of mask in the second image. In the first image the large OOF portion dominates the image a bit too much IMO. In the second image having eye contact with the person as well as the eye of the mask works well. The white doesn't bother me so much due to the brightness being held down on it. Now if the woman in the first image would have turned her head...

Nice effort.

[Tejal]

You do come up with some creative ideas, Tejal. I agree with others that the first image is the stronger of the two due to the more interesting person moving into the frame. However I like the lesser amount of mask in the second image. In the first image the large OOF portion dominates the image a bit too much IMO. In the second image having eye contact with the person as well as the eye of the mask works well. The white doesn't bother me so much due to the brightness being held down on it. Now if the woman in the first image would have turned her head...

Nice effort.

Thank you for your feedback. ☺

[Urbanflyer]

Love watching your concepts develop!

[Tejal]

Love watching your concepts develop!

Thank you.