Kite Flying day celebration (B) - C&C are welcome !!

[Tejal]

Kindly share your C&C for my below picture.

Thanks,

Tejal


IMG_2005 by Tejal Imagination, on Flickr

[Dave Humphries]

Hi Tejal,

You know I usually like your work, but for me, although the idea is good ...

a) I really don't like the smudgy areas around the people
b) They are quite noisy, especially in those smudgy areas
c) I wondered about simplifying the shapes by cloning out the two stick things?
d) I also wondered whether, given time and interaction, a better grouping/silhouette of the people shapes might have been possible?
e) I see no (obvious) connection to Kites as the subject - only you know this context

a) - c) could be revisited with better processing, I think.

With regard to d), if you have other shots, I wonder whether you might find better people silhouettes (for the two blocks) in two different images and be able to merge them in post processing as one?
The person crouching in the right hand group almost looks like a satellite dish.
The two people looking out of frame to left, in left hand group, don't aid the composition (for me)

Sorry to be harsh - I usually do that to Izzie

Anyway, I know you'd rather I be honest, so I hope my thoughts help.

Looking forward to V2

Cheers, Dave

[Tejal]

Hi Tejal,

You know I usually like your work, but for me, although the idea is good ...

a) I really don't like the smudgy areas around the people
b) They are quite noisy, especially in those smudgy areas
c) I wondered about simplifying the shapes by cloning out the two stick things?
d) I also wondered whether, given time and interaction, a better grouping/silhouette of the people shapes might have been possible?
e) I see no (obvious) connection to Kites as the subject - only you know this context

a) - c) could be revisited with better processing, I think.

With regard to d), if you have other shots, I wonder whether you might find better people silhouettes (for the two blocks) in two different images and be able to merge them in post processing as one?
The person crouching in the right hand group almost looks like a satellite dish.
The two people looking out of frame to left, in left hand group, don't aid the composition (for me)

Sorry to be harsh - I usually do that to Izzie

Anyway, I know you'd rather I be honest, so I hope my thoughts help.

Looking forward to V2

Cheers, Dave

Thanks Dave for your valuable suggestions. And you are not at all harsh. I post my images to get the suggestions and critics , so that i can improve. And trust me, I am a good and obedient student .

Your all suggestions I have noted. I will try to process it again considering your suggestions.

Thanks once again.

Regards,

Tejal

[Shadowman]

Nicely done, I think both work separately and more closely cropped. There are little bits of detail (the glasses, hat, child, and interaction between the two figures) that make the images more personal and interesting.

[Tejal]

Nicely done, I think both work separately and more closely cropped. There are little bits of detail (the glasses, hat, child, and interaction between the two figures) that make the images more personal and interesting.

Thanks John .

[Geoff F]

Maybe the edges around the back lit people aren't absolutely perfect; but they still look good. Although I do wonder if having just one group of people would produce a stronger overall scene. Probably the left group looks best to me.

And I also agree about cloning out that narrow upright black bit of the platforms.

[Tejal]

Maybe the edges around the back lit people aren't absolutely perfect; but they still look good. Although I do wonder if having just one group of people would produce a stronger overall scene. Probably the left group looks best to me.

And I also agree about cloning out that narrow upright black bit of the platforms.

Thanks for your valuable suggestions.

[IzzieK]

Tejal...I like it when Dave is harsh in assessing my shots. It makes me learn how to be careful...

Anyway, I like the idea of this shot. I know it could be better, but those that Dave mentioned are easy fixed in pp.

[Tejal]

Tejal...I like it when Dave is harsh in assessing my shots. It makes me learn how to be careful...

Anyway, I like the idea of this shot. I know it could be better, but those that Dave mentioned are easy fixed in pp.

Thanks Izzie for your comment. And even I dont mind for the harsh critics. Same, it makes me learn and make me careful. .

About the suggestions in processing picture, yes I will try my best .