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    Clarissa

    This is my daughter, sometimes she will pose and most times well.....
    Canon 550D 50mm f1.8 @ f1.8 1/200 sec ISO 100

    I'm trying to use builders lights, they aren't very bright, they won't stay where you try to put them, they were cheap and I don't know any better as I have never used proper lights. But I do growl using them.

    C&C will be helpfull

    Clarissa

    Clarissa

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    Re: Clarissa

    Lovely young lady!

    I'm not a portrait expert however the rim of her hat seems a tad too encroaching on the plane of her eyes; also has an alternating dark / light pattern to it that's a bit distracting (more pronounced in the monochrome version). Would have liked to see her entire chin as well. Do you have a wider crop perhaps? Also, and it may just be me, but it seems her right (camera right) eye is in focus but her left isn't, so there's maybe a depth of field adjustment necessary if you give it another go. What was your aperture and focal length?

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    Re: Clarissa

    Rob
    My intention was to get the rim of the hat as close to her eyes as possible.
    I used a 50mm lens at f1.8
    More chin would have been better.
    I have a vision of just eyes and hat rim - a long and thin crop but all in focus.

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    Re: Clarissa

    Hey Stephen!

    My first thoughts mirrored Roberts regarding the hat.

    But since this is something you are going for, might I merely suggest that when/if you can get her to sit for you next that she maybe lift her head just enough to get a bit of space between her eyes and the hat brim so that the brim doesn’t compete with the eyes as much? Or else maybe get the brim as close as possible to evenly spaced above both eyes? What I am trying to say is that one eyebrow is visible, the other not so much so.

    So since that is a kind of subjective thing, may I further suggest that possibly the camera right background might successfully use some dusting up? Seems to be a streak of something horizontal about ¾’s down that might be better off not there. Maybe a hair or something (barely visible) hanging down off the camera right side of her hat brim.

    If I had shot this, Stephen, I might be tempted to just touch up a couple of stray hairs on that side while I was at it.

    The most important thing I could say to you about this shot is that you have a very beautiful daughter and whether she likes it or not she takes a great photo!

    Looking forward to seeing more of her!

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    Re: Clarissa

    Thanks for your thoughts Terry. I didn't see the gunk on the right side of the image. This is an experiment, the image is in the head and I'm trying to get it out.
    Thanks again for your thoughts.

    There will be more images of my darling little daughter.
    Last edited by Dave Humphries; 22nd May 2012 at 11:27 AM. Reason: Added link to Clarissa II thread

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    Re: Clarissa

    Hi Stephen,

    I think I like the B/W a little better for this shot. I can see what you were going for with the hat/eyes and personally it works for me. The two things that do bug me a little are...
    1) It could use a little sharpening.
    2) A little crop along the top might place her eyes in a better position

    Clarissa

    Overall I really like this shot.

    Shawn

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