Hi Kris,
The "BW retouched" of second shot is, for me, the best by far. It minimises the distracting colours on the wall, her eyes are sharp and the B&W contrast ratio is good, compared to some of the others.
That said, you still have your daughter far too close to the background in all cases.
I always recommend having more distance behind the subject (to the background) than there is between camera and subject. Not that I do portraiture often, but that theory works for bird tables in front of hedges - not that I'm saying ... oh, you know what I mean (I hope)
Have you had a read through Colin's
excellent series on the topic?
BTW, this was a very good way to show us what you had shot and how you'd improved it, full marks for that.
Hope that helps,